Time to redpill my libtard English teacher, Sup Forums

Hey Sup Forums. I'm basically writing a paper about LA (city in literature)
> inb4 pls sink into sea
and I decided to try to redpill my tibtard, SJW teach about celebrities and their normalization of degeneracy which (among other things) gives LA a bad rap.

What's the best argument for the pov that celebrities (especially degenerate instagram celebs) should essentially be gassed asap?

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shameless self-bump(if that even works)

Name the Frankfurt school and the joos that run it, also cultural marxism

Learn how to write, jesus christ.

Your writing abilities suck. You have commas in places they shouldn't be. You have too many commas in places where technically they're appropriate, but make you sound like a retard writing women's fiction from the 19th century. Your arguments are poorly explored and you have a lot of barely supported opinions masked as fact. Plus, the subject is gay anyway.

Tips senpai?

Fuck my shit up. Will it pass for high school senior level (after fixing commas)?

your paper is pretty ironic. You come to Sup Forums for advice on your Trump shilling paper knowing everyone here sucks his pissy dick. Pretty hilarious.
that shit is barely 8th grade level to be honest.

The paper is unreadable.

You can have the best points in the world, but when you look like a faggot and your shits all fucked up, the message will be ignored.

Depends on if you're in ap, honors, or retard level. Should probably work for honors or under to at least pass....

Also

>"literally Hitler".

period always comes before the closing quotation mark, even though it looks worse in comparison.

>that shit is barely 8th grade level to be honest.

While I agree, you severely overestimate the level of writing ability displayed by a vast majority of people, much less kids in high school.


Don't you have a rubric

It's a first draft so I'll rewrite it to get the syntax aligned. I basically need good points rn

the rubric is very loose. just needs to be 4-5 pages and have some quotes included

Cite your quotes at least, for fucks sake.

I mean something like this

Just outline and draft it in a very formulaic and structured manner, and in a later draft or final draft, adjust it for flow and to make it non-repetitive.

It would also be good to know what the exact "prompt" is and what your "thesis" and entire idea is in the paper, not just "kek I rodpall my teechur"

> comic sans
Thanks for the rubric. Will probably use

You're going to look like a dumbass.

>everyone here sucks his pissy dick
whats a dick even supposed to do beyond pissing you retard, does yours shoot lasers?

His dick shoots kidney stones, naturally

cum lasers

What I have so far in case you wanted to know
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>What do creative people have in common?

In the type of paper you seem to be writing, you don't usually ever want to do "question and answer" type things, it doesn't go over very well, you don't want it to be 'casual conversation' because you're making points to support an argument.

got it. Thanks for the help

It also seems more like you're writing an editorial for a evangelical college's campus newspaper than an argumentative paper about a book.

it's not really a book report--just riffing but using some bits of the book to reinforce. Again, not a final draft by any means(probably only half done)

"libtard, SJW teach" here. sam, let's talk after class tomorrow.

redpill teacher on jaffe memo and Soft Genocide Measures Promoted by American Eugenics & Planned Parenthood to reduce US population in 1969.

jaffememo.com/full-list-of-population-control-measures-listed-on-the-jaffe-memo/62.htm

detail on Rockefeller, Carnegie, Nazi, eugenics and the history of it all

lmao. I'll consider it

emphasize:

>after the defeat of nazi germany, eugenics was rebranded

>how they switched from hard genocide of the past to more sophisticated soft genocide of modern times

>American Eugenics Society became "Society for Biodemography and Social Biology"

>British Eugenics Society became "Galton Institute"

>The American eugenics was funded by various corporate foundations including the Carnegie Institution, Rockefeller Foundation, and the Harriman

>German Nazi eugenics was funded by he Rockefeller Foundation.[8]

>The Rockefeller Foundation even funded of the research conducted by Josef Mengele

>Population Council Established in 1952 by John D. Rockefeller III, with important funding from the Rockefeller Brothers Fund, The Council has its roots in the discredited eugenics movement.

> Planned Parenthood received extensive funding from John D. Rockefeller Jr. and his family, who continued to make anonymous donations to Sanger's causes in subsequent decades

You're writing is absolute shit.

In fact, how long is this essay? I would almost be willing to rewrite it in it's entirety.

None of that demonstrates an in-depth knowledge of the texts you're supposedly examining, and after briefly name-dropping them at the beginning of the excerpt you've wasted hundreds of words waffling about the current political climate instead.

If you've been asked to discuss the way that LA is presented in literature, you are supposed to write an essay about the literature that depicts LA, not about the city as you personally perceive it.

It's an English paper, it's not a fucking opinion piece for you to upload to your blog. You get a big fat F and I'm calling in your parents to recommend remedial tutoring because at this point you're just too far behind the class.

>starting a sentence with like
Fucking hell, learn how to write a formal essay.

[spoiler]Or is this how burgers are actually taught how to write? It's disgusting to read and has no flow whatsoever[/spoiler]

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Tell me what you think. I took some of the blatant shit out and made it a bit more subtle as so it would be readable to someone who disagrees. Check for grammar.

>In this sense it is erratic to state that
It should be
In this sense it is not erratic to state that

This too. I haven't read the book so I just kind of went with the ideas you had going, but it needs to be more intertwined with what the book portrays.

LA is the heart of progressive liberalism.
Do you really need more reasons then that? Just list all the degeneracy progressives offer mankind, like being pro-pedophile or voting for socialism.

Teachers, generally failures in their fields or in English/history are usually idealists and socialist, as they lack any sort of realism specifically when talking about what things should be like. You've got to attack them at the ideological level and at the realist level rather subtlety.

The most vilified people in America are white men. Another gift from progressive politics.

>Out for drinks with a friend
>Shows me this list of white privileges on why whites are racist
>First on list is that we can 'hangout with our own race if we want'
Only went down from there. I tried to discuss that some whites did profit off of slavery and some were disproportionately wealthy due to that, so I could see why they might claim that was white privilege(though I argued the semantics were aggressive), but he said that wasn't the issue and instead relied on feelings shit.
Sometimes I can't deal with modern society.

I taught grade school for years so that's not true. I just really like working with the kids and it gave me a chance to red pill them daily.

I'm speaking in general. I can't judge an individual by a demographic, but I can judge a demographic by a demographic.
Most teachers at my school were incredibly lazy and unmotivated, and it was clear they wished they were somewhere else.

You have horrible grammar and sentence syntax. 0/10 paper.

You have absolutely no running sentences. They sound very stilted. I'm writing like you write. See how shit it is? You need to fix this.

This is what happens when you have a spoiled society. These people need to invent hardship to make their lives feel worthwhile. They are so desperate for some great battle to be a part of so they can feel special it really show how these liberals are just ego addicted freaks.

I mean I get the argument of white privilege from an economic stance to an extent, but everyone gets treated like shit daily. If you're offended by how someone is treating you, move on and ignore them. I'm not especially wealthy or attractive (or smart) and when people give me shit, I just ignore it and go on with my life.

OP is probably 15 years old so he'll earn a solid B since teachers aren't expecting much.

They probably won't even read it. I always was upset in high school because my teachers would just through a grade on a paper and I would actually want to know what they thought of the prose and such.

Are you faggots that retarded? Eons of shitposting about how awesome trump is, how redpilled Sup Forums is, and whatever other shit and that's what you have to say to him?
OP is doing what none of you shitters have the courage to do IRL, and yet you're descouraging him instead of making his text better/helping him.

Poorly written in some places- dont say "they dont get that" that "they are unaware that" or unfamiliar etc

Dont use memes like literally hitler and if you want to mention #notmypresident etc provide more information

Assume your reader is against you and defend against possible counter arguments.

Dont argue the point as if voting republican is logical and everyone else is dumb. Argue it as the irrelevance and powerlessness of creating hashtags to protest a democratically elected president. Argue that the electoral college was only challenged after their candidate lost. Argue that they talked about moving to canada and did fuck all.

Never reveal your bias openly. Also write like me because I'm a a straight shooting, down to earth eloquent motherfucker.

No dude. White people are where they are because of hard work and sacrifice. Not privilege.

whenever some retard comes to Sup Forums saying "im about to BTFO my teacher LOL, REKT", its ALWAYS some fucker that has the writing skill of a 10 year old. im not surprised you all hang out on fucking Sup Forums. go read books, essays, monographs on history to become a better and sharper version of yourself. having the greater knowledge of alt media will not give you the upper hand when it comes to analyzing an argument or proving a point.

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