Hey Sup Forums I'm writing a rap and want to know how you'd feel if you heard some of your favorite rappers say these lines (would they make you say "dayum I like that clever line". They are separate from one another just ideas I have
All the similes I say I'm a Minute Made man like lemonade
I'm on that 21 scene like black jack On the big screen like jack black Bad bitch but she bad in the sack Matter of fact You should go home watch a porno so you can reenact
They say man give us a metaphor Bitch I'm a matador I ain't taken your bull shit anymore
Jonathan Reed
Also I'm 21 (why I'm on that 21 scene)
Hudson Long
Keep it as a hobby my man. Its aight
Isaac Barnes
lol
Luis Johnson
All tha similez I say I be a Minute Made playa like lemonade
I be on dat 21 scene like black nigger On tha big-ass screen like jack trigger Shiznitty biiiatch but her big-ass booty shitty up in tha sack An as a Matta of fact Yo ass should bounce back ta tha doggy den peep a porno so you can reenact
They say playa give our asses a metaphor Bitch I be a mad ass whore I ain't taken yo' bull shiznit no mo'
Robert Butler
To be honest, no, they seem unfinished and like the rhymes are the main focus, not the actual point you're trying to make.
Carter Kelly
Ok they are simply one liners obviously the song needs a focus but you can throw lines like these into a lot of different shit just because it's clever. Do you listen to rap?
Tyler Wood
Do you actually get the jokes though? Like Minute Maid is a brand of lemonade, and that Matadors don't take Bull shit
Isaiah Rivera
When you're happy, It brings a smile to my lips, And when I'm rapping, It brings a sway to your hips. With a metaphor I say: My smile is 8 miles wide, With a simile I say: You're like a care-free child.
When you're happy, It brings a smile to my lips.
James Lopez
Thanks man
Oliver Williams
Yeah I get it, and I listen to rap, just on their own, these lines are nothing. No context.
Levi Taylor
Ok so like say for the first line I make a song about how I have street cred. Later I could say in the song I've got juice (another word for street cred) and somehow work that into the lemonade thing.
Christian Robinson
've never even attempted to rap. But here I go. This is one off for the bucket list.
I wakey and I bakey I'm 100% nakey I'm texting all my bitches While I'm wrapped up in my blankey
Howd I do gentlemen?
Lucas Gomez
Maybe just me, but it just seems lame. I like rap with something to say other than "LOok at ME Im coool!"
Nolan Robinson
Haterfag here, not terrible, better than OP.
Michael Clark
The best line ever is from Slim Shady's First EP The song is called murder murder The line goes like this:
"...Just then, the pigs bust in yellin Freeze But i'm already wanted for selling keys And a bunch of other felonies From A to Z Like spelling bees..."
Your lines are no where close to that but you got potential mate
Anthony Brown
Actually I could just say the line as it originally stands and the next line say, "I got that juice"
And rhyme from there
Ryan Gray
OP RAP. fresh off the dome im high af.
>Uh.. I disappoint my parents.. >Disappoint my parents... >My dad can't look at my face >Kid nap a child I got- *insert hook* >CP ON MY PC. CP ON MY PC. CP ON MY PC.
I BOMB TESTS LIKE THE USA I SUCK DICKS IM OP IM GAY I STARE AT TRAPS ALL DAY I GOT CUM IN MY D.N.A. I GOT A SNAP BACK AND A TATTOO >TRAMP STAMP I TONGUE SACKS AND SLAP TOO *air horn* I CANT FIGHT I BITE I'LL SCRATCH YOU IM A PEDOPHILE IF YOU'RE 5 I'LL SNATCH YOU
>snatch you. snatch you.
*insert the hook 5x until song ends.*
Tyler Barnes
I love that album and song.
What do you think about this original I thought up yesterday:
Years 94' and my trunk is raw No the view mirror it's the moths fuckin law Got two choices naw Pull over the car oar Put it to the double put the pedal to the flaw
Alexander Wright
Topkek
Mason Wilson
Lold >cum in my DNA
Cooper Taylor
Not bad
Samuel White
Protip: rap is for niggers and rap is not music.
This shit is gay O.P. is gay Back in the day Bush one was droppin them bombs I was fuckin yer moms Yer daddy didn't get a say He tried to call a pig But I got away My dick is big Yours is not I drink champagne You lick your snot Rap is easy Its simple as pie Your rhymes are cheesy Your face is greasy Your breath is wheezy And now you gotta die