FIRST DRAFT: The Amazing Spider-Man 2

The movie could've been a lot better.

>Peter begins working at the Daily Bugle and meets J. Jonah Jameson and Robbie Robertson. Jameson's hatred of Spider-Man is born when the Bugle's print room is damaged in a battle between Spider-Man and Electro.

>Mary-Jane Watson is Peter's neighbor, a waitress and part-time mechanic who lives with her abusive father and is fascinated by Spider-Man, having a tattoo of him on his wrist, but is also attracted to Peter. Spider-Man later threatens MJ's father into leaving her alone.

>Max Dillon lives his domineering, wheelchair-bound mother who mistreats him. Returning home after his accident, Max finds his mother standing up and celebrating the hush money she received from OsCorp to not report his disappearance, and accidentally kills her, causing him to spiral into insanity.

>Peter gives Harry his blood, which turns Harry into the Green Goblin. Harry flees to Norman's old boathouse after OsCorp is stolen from him by Rajit Ratha, where he finds the exoskeleton Norman had used to stay alive and is later located by Electro, who escapes from Ravencroft hellbent on revenge on Harry, whom he believes authorized the experiments on him. The two then join forces to get revenge on OsCorp and Spider-Man.

>Peter nearly kills Harry after Harry taunts him for failing to save Gwen.

>At Gwen's grave, Peter is visited by his father, Richard, who faked his death and encourages Peter to become Spider-Man once again.

>Aleksei Sytsevich builds the Rhino himself out of old Soviet-era weaponry to challenge Spider-Man.

>Gustav Fiers reports to Norman, who had faked his death in order to clone a healthy young body for himself, having used Harry as a pawn to test the effects of a sample of Peter's blood in DNA affected by the Osborns' disease. Norman is also in possession of a symbiotic suit developed by Richard and him.

>No references to the Sinister Six.

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Sounds just as shitty really, just in different ways

This whole "spider-man by design/everything is Oscorp" universe was flawed at the conceptual level.

Sam Raimi's villains minus Venom were all connected to Oscorp too. It's just a neat way to justify so many supervillains being created by fringe science experiments gone wrong.

>Inferior cast Jameson being given a real reason to dislike Spider-Man
>More beta Electro cringy shit
>Spider-Man's blood is magic
>PETER'S DAD IS ALIVE
>Clones
This all sounds like horrid shit, this movie never had a chance.

>two fake off deaths in the same film.

Sounds just as shit as the original to me.

>>At Gwen's grave, Peter is visited by his father, Richard, who faked his death and encourages Peter to become Spider-Man once again.

That deleted scene was somewhere on Youtube.

Here it is:

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I like connecting Oscorp to much of the Spider-Man mythos but I think that having Spidey himself a product of Oscorp takes away from the character a bit.

This is still way more dumb than having Tony act as a surrogate father in Homecoming.

Really? the experiment in wich Flint fell into was an Oscorp experiment?

>Both father leave a genetic legacy to their sons.
>Richard's is an extension of his altruism, Norman's is a reflex of his ruthlessness.

>Both Richard and Norman return after their apparent deaths.
>Richard to inspire Peter, Norman to exploit Harry.

Sounds like kino to me.

I think it adds to the Peter/Norman dynamic

It just doesn't work. The script is not strong enough to support this scene.
And I love Andrew Garfield, he is my fave cinematic Peter.

The problem is the way this script sounds is that they wanted to do everything at once.

Let's put in Electro!
Let's put in the Green Goblin!
Let's make Harry the Green Goblin!
Let's do the Death of Gwen Stacy!
Let's reveal Peter's dad is alive!
Let's have Mary Jane cameo!
Let's put in the Rhino briefly!

Apparently it was a Quest Aerospace experiment. A last-ditch effort after the Green Goblin blew up their exosuit in the first movie.

First drafts of the previous movies.

>Spider-Man reveals himself to the public by rescuing the victims of a subway crash.

>Peter and Harry aren't friends, and Peter has a crush on MJ, who begins dating Harry. Peter later moves in with Harry so Aunt May can rent out his room, in exchange for helping Harry with his studies, and becomes closer to MJ, to Harry's anger. Norman despises Harry and believes that OsCorp will be ruined under his management.

>Norman forces Harry to fire OsCorp's head scientist Otto Octavius, but Octavius lashes out and causes an explosion that fuses his mechanical arms to his spine and exposes Norman to a supersoldier serum that turns him into the Green Goblin.

>The Green Goblin attempts to kill Harry during OsCorp's Thanksgiving parade, but is foiled by Spider-Man and vows revenge. Norman later discovers Peter's secret identity during a Thanksgiving dinner at Harry's apartment and vows revenge.

>Otto watches their fight on TV, vows revenge on the Green Goblin for stealing his designs and attacks the Daily Bugle newspaper, believing Peter can lead him to the Green Goblin.

>Peter abandons the identity of Spider-Man after Aunt May is hospitalized, and lashes out at MJ when she attempts to comfort him. Norman later lures Peter, MJ and Harry to OsCorp to kill them, but Spider-Man stops him. The Green Goblin kidnaps MJ and attempts to throw her off the Brooklyn Bridge, but Spider-Man saves her.

>Spider-Man and Green Goblin are both attacked by Doctor Octopus. Spider-Man defeats them and both are arrested and vow revenge on Spider-Man, and so does Harry after he sees MJ kissing him.

>Peter and MJ later mend their friendship, but she friendzones Peter and breaks up with Harry to keep pursuing Spider-Man.

>Peter and Harry are living together, but a increasingly paranoid Harry decides to move to Osborn Manor, forcing Peter to relocate to a rundown apartment.

>Mary-Jane Watson develops a relationship with Dr. Otto Octavius, a handsome youn scientist who created the genetically enhanced spiders that created Spider-Man. Octavius has developed four mechanical arms to conduct experiments and a "pacer chip" coded to Spider-Man's DNA.

>Harry puts a $10 million bounty on Spider-Man's head through the Daily Bugle, and Peter steals the pacer chip and injects it in himself, supressing his superpowers and allowing him to have a normal life. Meanwhile,

>Octavius becomes addicted to the endorphin needed to endure the pain of being connected to the arms, and falls under thei influence. He spirals out of control, forcing Peter to intervene to stop him. In the ensuing fight, his arms are fused to his spine.

>Harry puts a $10 million bounty on Spider-Man's head through the Daily Bugle, and Peter steals the pacer chip and injects it in himself, supressing his superpowers and allowing him to have a normal life. A vengeful Octavius later bargains with Harry to kill Spider-Man for the $10 million.

>Doctor Octopus kidnaps MJ to lure Peter into a trap and prepares to extract his spine, intending to use his enhanced DNA to stabilize the procedure and prevent the arms from killing him, in the process revealing Peter's secret identity to MJ and Harry. MJ convinces Otto to stop, and Peter rescues MJ and Harry from Octavius' collapsing laboratory, while Octavius stays behind to die. Harry swears revenge against Peter for his father's death, and later discovers the Green Goblin's lair, while Peter and MJ finally get together.

>Black Cat appears as a seductive cat burglar trying to steal Octavius' research, who tries to lure Peter away from his responsabilities to be with her.

>Dr. Curt Connors has a larger role, leading to his transformation into the Lizard in a post-credits scene.

>No Gwen Stacy and no Venom.

>Peter becomes selfish and arrogant due to the public's newfound adoration for Spider-Man, and must grapple with the fact that good people such as MJ, Harry, Flint Marko and even himself sometimes do bad things due to the circumstances.

>Adrian Toomes is Flint Marko's former cellmate, a criminal engineer who wants revenge against Spider-Man for arresting him. After a vengeful Spider-Man nearly kills Marko to avenge Uncle Ben, Marko breaks Toomes out of prison to help him plan a new heist to secure the money for his daughter's medical expenses and kill Spider-Man. Toomes has developed mechanical wings to challenge Spider-Man while in prison and adopts the identity of The Vulture. Ben Kingsley was approached for the role.

>During the final battle, Marko finds out that his daughter's condition is terminal, and she can't be cured anymore. She asks Marko to spend her last days by her side. Marko apologizes to Peter for killing Uncle Ben and leaves with his family after Peter forgives him and lets him go.

>Once Gwen Stacy and Venom were introduced, the plan was for Sandman, Vulture and New Goblin to be the villains of SPIDER-MAN 3, with Peter rejecting the symbiote, who would bond with Eddie Brock to become Venom in SPIDER-MAN 4.

>Once Venom was included in SPIDER-MAN 3 at the expense of the Vulture, Sandman and him would kidnap Gwen to lure Spider-Man into a trap, with MJ convincing Harry to help Peter.

>Flash Thompson attempts to help Spider-Man fight the Lizard during the attack on Midtown, proving to Peter that Flash is a good guy deep down, and causes Flash to develop an admiration for Spider-Man.

>Flash's opportunistic girlfriend Ariel Keene continuously attempts to seduce Peter after he humilliates Flash in a basketball match.

>Peter finds out that OsCorp is connected to his parents' disappearance and engineered the accident that gave him his powers in order to acquire a sample of his blood, since the venom of the genetically engineered spiders created by Richard Parker is coded to the Parkers' DNA.

>Curt Connors' superior is Dr. Nels Van Atter, who is exposed to Peter's blood and becomes a monstrous creature known as "Proto-Goblin", attacking both Spider-Man and the Lizard at OsCorp Tower.

>The "Man in the Shadows" is Max Dillon, Norman Osborn's superpowered enforcer and the man who murdered Peter's parents, by causing the electrical malfunction that took down their plane.

one thing i liked about asm is that the recombination serum seemed to extremify personalities, much like gen factor in gen13.

having blank serum sprayed all over new york actually makes for an effective explanation for the emergence of so many weirdos, while also providing a metaphor for entering adulthood.

but of course, asm1 was not self contained (there was no rational explanation for how peter got his powers) and then asm2 happened so...


honestly, like another user said, this script seems shitty too for different reasons.

it also takes away from the universe. when i was a kid, i loved how nuts the marvel universe was. you had doctor octopus and you had the green goblin, and the two weren't connected at all. having all of those villains arise out of the same organization with the same pursuits makes spidey's world seem kinda small and trite, especially when compared to the original.

>Max Dillon lives his domineering, wheelchair-bound mother who mistreats him. Returning home after his accident, Max finds his mother standing up and celebrating the hush money she received from OsCorp to not report his disappearance, and accidentally kills her, causing him to spiral into insanity.

Much better than HURR SPIDER-MAN FORGOT MUH NAME INSANE IN THE MEMBRANE

>(there was no rational explanation for how peter got his powers)

Didn't "genetically modified spider" cover it? The Parker DNA stuff in TASM2 was unnecessary.

not in context.

having a single radioactive spider confer magic radioactive powers because radioactivity is unpredictable and weird makes sense. having a modified spider that produces recombination serum in its fangs also makes sense.

having mass produced modified spiders for the purpose of harvesting their webbing, and keeping them in a tank that keeps them highly agitated, and having this result in only one spider-man makes no sense.

also, having peter be the result of an oscorp experiment makes peter less of a product of a capricious universe, which somehow weakens his story.

60's peter's story is essentially: life gets weird and uncomfortable but you gotta keep trucking, and you have to stay true to what you love.

his powers of agility are a perfect metaphor for how you have to be agile to adapt to life.

peter and his rogues gallery are unique in that his villains are each a twisted mirror of peter himself, with one key difference being that each of them have set themselves down a path from which they will not deviate, whereas peter is self effacing and can change. even his battles reflect this, with peter often losing his first encounters.

having oscorp be the center of peter's universe just seems... idunno. having peter himself be the semi intentional result of an oscorp experiment just changes his story completely. what started as a story about will vs destiny, between immediate desires vs desired outcome, between ego and superego and id, between want and ought, between right and wrong essentially, becomes this thing about a conspiracy between parents and the elites who plan our lives... i don't hate it but it's not really a spider-man story.

my headcanon before asm2 was that dr connors created a recombination spider in secret to not have to be accountable to oscorp for his tissue regeneration project. he used a spider simply because the spiders were available, but then the spider got lost because it's a fucking spider and they move fast. it ended up in the spider tank because it makes sense that a hunter would find its prey.

the connection to peter's parents is that they were the ones who came up with the webbing spiders. it's not perfect, but at least there's still some connection between peter and his webbing. it comes down to genetic destiny, but then again you don't get to choose if you're born smart or dumb.

and then asm2 happened and welp...

Everything past Peter nearly killing Harry was either shit or unnecessary. I also don't like the idea of JJJ having a completely reasonable hatred for Spider-Man

Electro & Harry should've set their sights solely on OsCorp. Spider-Man intervenes, and puts a stop to Electro. Having little left to live for, Harry decides to get personal and jump-starts the death of Gwen Stacy

Great for a TV show, fucking deplorable for a movie

>part-time mechanic
Why?

>i loved how nuts the marvel universe was. you had doctor octopus and you had the green goblin, and the two weren't connected at all. having all of those villains arise out of the same organization with the same pursuits makes spidey's world seem kinda small and trite
All of this, there's not even need to explain so much about the villains.

addendum
*between right and wrong which is often not obvious at all

spider-man isn't some simplistic hero who always does the right thing. things usually turn out alright in the end* because it's a fucking comic book and is designed to be entertaining, but it's almost iconic that peter must stride boldly into the future despite not knowing for sure what to do. and he is often the cause of his own misery.

for instance, he adopts the 'friendly neighborhood spiderman' persona to ingratiate himself to the public, but this ends up alienating him from other superheroes.

at least half of parker luck is caused by parker himself.


*the one thing that irritated me about spider-girl early on is that peter supposedly quit because he lost a leg. fucking hell, that's not peter parker! peter fucking parker would make a fake leg and get into fake leg shenanigans, with his villains now thinking that spider-man has the ability to regenerate his limbs. peter parker loves being spider-man, and he has admitted this on many occassions. i find it impossible that peter would just quit.

i'm probably burning ideas here but i always thought it would be interesting to see a more grown up peter parker who has to deal with bigger threats, international threats, and bigger screw ups, like being an enemy of shield, all while juggling his life as a father, a husband, and as a man who has to deal with the cut throat business world (but winning in the end, because comic books).

in my mind, the end game would be for peter parker to become a scientist explorer in 21xx, having quit being spider-man long ago due to advancing age (but not before reaching 70), yet still being at peak human fitness due to his spider powers. he would end up travelling the universe like mr fantastic or the guardians. it's pure fan fiction, but there it is.

i just burned that idea didn't i.

i wonder how trashy that sounds compared to the shit in these scripts.

>The movie could've been a lot better.

Realistically they were never likely to re-cast the role of Spider-Man/Peter Parker for the sequel, so no.

>Norman forces Harry to fire OsCorp's head scientist Otto Octavius, but Octavius lashes out and causes an explosion that fuses his mechanical arms to his spine and exposes Norman to a supersoldier serum that turns him into the Green Goblin.

>Otto watches their fight on TV, vows revenge on the Green Goblin for stealing his designs and attacks the Daily Bugle newspaper, believing Peter can lead him to the Green Goblin.

>Peter abandons the identity of Spider-Man after Aunt May is hospitalized, and lashes out at MJ when she attempts to comfort him. Norman later lures Peter, MJ and Harry to OsCorp to kill them, but Spider-Man stops him. The Green Goblin kidnaps MJ and attempts to throw her off the Brooklyn Bridge, but Spider-Man saves her.

>Spider-Man and Green Goblin are both attacked by Doctor Octopus. Spider-Man defeats them and both are arrested and vow revenge on Spider-Man, and so does Harry after he sees MJ kissing him.

wow, that's way too much for one movie...


>Mary-Jane Watson develops a relationship with Dr. Otto Octavius, a handsome youn scientist who created the genetically enhanced spiders that created Spider-Man. Octavius has developed four mechanical arms to conduct experiments and a "pacer chip" coded to Spider-Man's DNA.

WHAT IS THIS FUCKING SHIT

>Peter steals the pacer chip and injects it in himself, supressing his superpowers and allowing him to have a normal life.

this is even gayer than peter losing his powers because muh depression.

>Octavius becomes addicted to the endorphin needed to endure the pain of being connected to the arms, and falls under thei influence. He spirals out of control, forcing Peter to intervene to stop him. In the ensuing fight, his arms are fused to his spine.

...what.

raimi is a fucking genius for having created two decent films out of this garbage.


>Black Cat appears as a seductive cat burglar trying to steal Octavius' research, who tries to lure Peter away from his responsabilities to be with her.

YES.

>This whole "spider-man by design/everything is Oscorp" universe was flawed at the conceptual level.

I'd have that rather than "Everything is designed by Tony Stark"