Idyll Haven [Feedback requested]

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A few months ago I uploaded previous chapters here, since each one is a pain in the ass to produce and takes a few months (this one 8 months).

I've taken previous critiques into consideration for previous chapters and will be applying changes based on said criticism when I start printing them. We're currently editing Chapter I and I will be exclusively posting progress on this thread if it lives that long, as your feedback is welcome, because I'm a whore for Sup Forums, because I love you guys.

For now I'll just start dumping Chapter III.

I will only post links if requested as Sup Forums usually hates shills. You can reverse google search the pages or just look for "Idyll Haven" if you really want to see what I posted here in the past, but be aware that what's online are just drafts.

I'll be dumping the other pages here for now.

As stated, feedback welcome. If this thread is dead by the time I get around to uploading Edits for Chapter I, I'll start a new one.

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Page 20 - I'll be posting the rest later, nature calls/

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Page 28, last page.

Feedback welcome. Fap to it, poop on it, burn it, shove it up someone's bum, etc.

I worked my ass on off this, so plz no ignore.

What the fuck is going on here? Is that some kind of sound wave?