What do you guys think of this editorial i wrote about how trump's immigration ban can effect american buisness

What do you guys think of this editorial i wrote about how trump's immigration ban can effect american buisness

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FAKE NEWS

OP is a huge faggot

ad hominem

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Vapid

Sup Forums is for people aged 18 and over. Kids are not allowed here.

Effect=/affect.

You are not a writer, or a very bad one.

Sheeeiiit

There's lots of extraneous information in there that serves little purpose other than sperging out about your visceral, emotional hatred for Donald Trump. Just write a paper about the issue at hand and cut the fluff. Also use 1 inch margins

Also President is capitalized, and you need to cite your sources. Also Sup Forums is for posters 18 and older.

>You are not a writer, or a very bad one.

No shit. This is just a kid doing a homework project. He doesn't understand the first thing about persuasion, emotive language and structuring.

wew

read first paragraph you are an idiot

Your writting style is boring and dull. Sorry pal

You need to go back to diagramming sentences, back to the basics. Your lack of any intuitive syntactic awareness is actually troubling.

you could get a job at Vox

but it's all retarded bullshit.

content: lacking
editing: terrible

would toss away

Looks incredibly basic and adds no new dialogue to the debate, nor does it give an interesting spin. Maybe at best your local hometown paper would take it. Saying this with no bias towards your position nor personal attack.
t. Guy who works with op-eds for a living

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You're supposed to keep an unbiased tone and let your data guide your audience to any conclusions you want them to have.
Have you learned nothing from Sup Forums and the "really makes you think" threads?
2/10.

how about first learning the difference between "effect" and "affect" you illiterate shit

You're a faggot, citing the Cato Institute, lol. If you are trying to get a good grade from a shitlib professor this will probably do it, though.

>All these pseudo intellectuals posting about how shit the writing is without actually giving any advice

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You also inadvertently admitted the problem is not an immigration ban, but a lack of suitable education.

Also, you are dismissing the Presidents reasoning for such a ban, the rise in extremism.

If someone were to join ISIS just because they cannot immigrate to the US, the never should be let in in the first place. They are not rational.

>Implying driving more muzzies into ISIS is a bad thing

How is this bad? Literally the whole world hates ISIS and finds it socially acceptable to destroy them. Islam is antithetical to the West and is seeking to invade and undermine it. The more muslims concentrate themselves into ISIS, the more of them we can get rid of without international repercussions.

Works for them too. They're so desperate to live under harsh, draconian Islamic rule? They get their wish.