I'm maing a Hitler cartoon. How good is my screenwriting so far?

Hitler cartoon Episode one draft
Hitler: I'm finally home. (arrives at his house and opens door)
(Hitler then walks up to his miniature robot wearing a stahlhelm and turns him on.)
(the robot is limp but boots up to steadfast position. His cannon goes "boioingoing" (penis joke))
Robot: Hi Hitler!
Hitler: IT'S HEILL HITLER!
Robot: Sorry
Hitler: How have things since I've been gone?
Robot: I've identified a new possible threat. We have a new neighbor, and he apears to look Jewish.
Hitler: Shizer! This has to be a Zionist spy! I'm going under cover.

(Hitler then suits up in a kaki trench coat, sunglasses and fedora.)
(Walks up to the neighbors house and passes by a ferrari parked in his driveway.)
(Hitler rings the doorbell and a man answers. He has a big nose with dark hair and wearing half a suit.)
(Note that he is supposed to be italian but this won't be revealed until later)
Hitler: Hallo. I am a detective from the police department here to investigate a crime which you may have a possible suspect in.
Neighbor: I can assure you I did nothing wrong. You can search my entire house and you wont find anything. I swear I didn't do it!
Hitler: What is "it"?
Neighbor: Whatever you're accusing me of.
Hitler: Hmm, I noticed you have a ferari in your driveway. What kind of work do you do for a living?
Neighbor: Nothing.
Hitler: What is your last name?
Neighbor: Uhhhhh Smith, yeah!
Hitler: You don't look like many Smiths.
Neighbor: Well... that's just what my last name is.
Hitler: Sure it is. Did you celebrate Christmas last year?
Neighbor: Not really. Christmas was great when I used to get stuff. Now as an adult, I have everything I want. Giving sucks when everyone you know is an ungrateful peace of...
Hitler: Those are all the questions I have for today. Thank you for your time, jew.
Neighbor: What did you just call me?
Hitler: Nothing. Carry on.


Read the rest here: pastebin.com/YAZE0MGj

BTW, there will be no Cartman in this cartoon. I'm currently working on the character model sheets.

How would the robot know what happened if he were powered down?

I guess I need to clear that up. The robot powers down and up on his own, but most robots don't do that. I might change it to Hitler banging on him.

>How have things since I've been gone?
Are you going for bad grammar because hes non native english speaker? If not then proofreading is in order.

Sounds retarded.

This is so fucking cringy.
>omg i'm so edgy for having hitler omg i'm going to be famous

It should be "How have things been since I've been gone?".
I guess I do need to proofread it. I haven't polished it much yet.

Good very good OP. Now all you need to include is the part where he's choking on black dick and it goes for a whole 30 minutes.

The real reason why I'm making a Hitler carton is not to be edgy. I'm just so tired of people called me a Nazi just because I voted for Trump. Yeah I know I have the Nazi flag on my posts. I plan on making this show somewhat a political satire as well.

>Tired of being called a Nazi
>Makes Hitle cartoon

Surely this will help

I just want to show the internet SJW's what Hitler was really like. If Hitler was alive today, I think he would have voted for Benie Sanders honestly because Hitler was a "National Socialist"

Don't include poison gas as a theme, gas chambers never existed, the Holocaust is a huge exaggeration.

This is really silly and I don't know why I laughed at this so much.

>I'm just so tired of people called me a Nazi just because I voted for Trump.

So making a Hitler cartoon will change peoples opinions? You're far better off using your voice than some cartoon.

But most people think the gas chambers existed. It can't turn into some David Icke comedy show.

I don't deny the holocaust happened, but I think the numbers of casualties were exaggerated. Could Auschwitz have used a firing squad instead of gas? Who knows? Innocent jews still died

>Jews
>Innocent

I can see how the instantaneously trigger-able SJW will react to my cartoon. Hopefully the decently intelligently people will see that I'm trying to show that Antifa and SJW's are the real Nazis. I'm going to have to put a disclaimer like south park does in every episode.

It sounds kinda like this old british sitcom about Hitler and Eva being forced to live next to a Jewish neighbour.

Heil Honey im Home was cancelled after 1 episode of course

George Soros, Israel, and the Rothschilds definitely aren't innocent, but Anne Frank did nothing wrong.

I was somewhat inspired by that show. I wish that show wasn't canceled lol

I'm not even sure what to say

>lose game of hide and seek
>nothing wrong

Please don't make this video

I think Hitler cheated by not counting to ten.

Why?