>Shinzo Abe has been secretly funding the production of anime/manga in Japan in order to intentionally lower birthrates to give him an excuse to replace them with robot citizens >Now comes in MC who is a government worker who somehow finds out about this so he secretly forms a rebellion >These rebels purposefully cause the incident in Fukushima >for what purpose? TO CREATE NULCEAR HUMANS >MC forms an army of nuclear humans to eventually fight Abe's robot army >now here's where the real MC comes in >real MC is half robot half nuclear human
>Isekai but in space >every love interest is a cute trap
Gavin Myers
>cute girls >do cute things >??? >PROFIT
Brody Ward
>abe >lower birth rates you fucked up.
Make a christmas cake harem show, and have it turn out that the main character a was put their by the government to encourage procreation.
Dominic Wright
Abe wanting to raise birthrates is disinfo to disguise his true aim, which is to lower them.
Luke Diaz
I had the same idea!
Luke Evans
A Slice of Life anime in a cyberpunk setting.
It's your typical "cute girls doing cute things" show, but things like armed soldiers and giant mechs outside, holographic displays, a girl taking off her prosthetic arm before onsen time, and pranks involving hacking into people's shells, and the shiny neon streets contrasted with the completely run down neighborhoods are all seen as nothing out of ordinary.
Thomas Fisher
Can we have an anime about pregnant school girls? Isn't it theoretically better for a girl to become pregnant during education because it's not as demanding as a job?
Dylan Cruz
It wouldn't sell until the robots are cute girls
Brandon Hughes
Cute girls in a pirate ship doing pirate things
Connor Thompson
we'll make the MC a cute girl
The nuclear human army weren't able to compete with the robots and their superior technology, so they bet everything on this girl by turning her into a half robot. She has nuclear capabilities with robot functions.
Angel Myers
A series heavily based/inspired be old Jackie Chan Movies and other Hong Kong action films
Isaiah Carter
I've been working on something, but I don't want to share. Instead, what are the things that would make a light novel less cringe, other than the fact that an autist is making it?
Easton Garcia
Whenever I sense an author trying to spin himself as something 'above' the genre he's working within, I cringe with utter disgust at his/her arrogance. :^)
Sebastian Foster
>Shinzo Abe Proposal rejected, we can't afford a lawsuit. Come back when his name's Shinjo Nabe.
Josiah Williams
Dwarf fortress comedy SoL that's it also female dwarfs are oppai lolis
Alexander Kelly
Where do westerners writing LNs publish them? If its online is there an actual website for it or just on tumblr? I'm not being an ass, i actually wanna know because i wanna maybe start writing one.
Zachary Brooks
Gotcha. I know my stuff is a bad try, and probably a bad form of political isekai. But, I have nothing better to do than write in the mornings. Well, I just kind of wanted to post it here when I finish the first book, or maybe by chapters, and unleash furious criticism. I have a thing for degradation.
Gabriel Thompson
Cute girls blocking your path
Nathan Brooks
IF I KILL YOU, I'LL BE JUST LIKE YOU
A man discovers a power within himself, the power to take on the form and personality of the people he kills. He discovers this when upon coming home one night he's assaulted in his living room by his christmas cake stalker and accidentally kills her when retaliation. Upon realizing what he's done he faints from the sheer horror and shock.
But when he wakes up it's not in his own body, but in the body of his stalker. What's more is that he can feel her emotions and thoughts as though resounding within his head. Her psychotic tendencies seep into him and he realizes she was mentally ill but manages to hold onto his sense of self.
As the story progresses he learns to switch between bodies and personalities at once and also begins to add people to his "selves" including influential politicians and affluential people. Eventually he reaches the point where he has access to a wide variety of abilities and skills, but the weight of his personalities bear down on him no matter what he does.
His insanity progresses alongside his greed and culminates in the final four episodes turning into a completely fucked up sequence of manic episodes and terrifying hallucinations as his ability to separate between who he is and who he's impersonating becomes less and less certain.
In the final episode he braces his resolve and kills himself to finally put an end to his suffering and the suffering of all the people inside of him only to wake up as the christmas cake, unsure as to whether he failed and transformed in his sleep or whether she was simply dreaming after her psychosis took a hold of her.
Thoughts?
Sebastian James
fund it
Christopher Hall
A boy falls in love with a girl.
Unable to confess, he is gifted by a deus ex machina with the girl's phone number. Never minding the strange area code, he immediately calls her, and is overjoyed to find out that she has a crush on him as well.
But, the next day, when he recounts the previous day's confessions to the girl, she only looks at him with a perplexed expression. After some investigation, he finds out that the girl he called is not the same girl he fell in love with. In fact, she doesn't exist in this universe at all. She is the girl's alternate universe counterpart, who has fallen in love with the MC's own AU self, who too is blissfully unaware of her crush.
Hijinks ensue as the two strike up a deal to give each other their darkest, most private secrets in order to equip the other with the weapons they need to conquer the heart of their other selves. While the two chase their respective loved ones, DRAMA ensues as they begin to fall in love with each other instead and question the NATURE of LOVE.
Threadly reminder that it has been made into a wiki, a fanfic, a fictionpress story, a manga, a meme, a TV tropes entry, an anime preview, an anime episode, an honest-to-goodness anime movie that's Oscar considered, and a critically acclaimed box office success that's the highest grossing anime film of all time and approved by Shinzo Abe and Cool Japan, so stop talking about it.
I just want an anime about Hardstyle or possible EDM in general.
Michael King
What makes Light Novels seem terrible to Americans compared to the Japanese is how they view tropes. Using tropes in writing isn't bad, in fact one could argue it's impossible to write a story without any use of tropes. Tropes in general are just metaphors for ideas or expressions. This is important to remember as what makes most Japanese Light Novels seem like dog shit to us is the heavy reliance on tropes. Instead of creating actual characters, these light novels copy characters that are popular by taking their behaviors and calling it a human being. For example, an infamous example of the tsundere trope is Asuka from Evangelion. Based on her behaviors alone we see her as a girl that's mean-spirited yet uses this to hide her feelings for Shinji. If you were to actually watch and learn more about her though you would realize Asuka is far more complicating that SuperBitch 1.0. Many authors don't bother to add that kind of background information to their characters and skip actually making their characters feel human to us. If their actions don't make sense to us then we can't sympathize with them. tl;dr: It's okay if you use tropes in your light novel but please remember what makes light novels feel cringe is the fact their characters are nothing more than catchphrases and aren't people we could meet in real life.
Also please share an excerpt of what you have. I want to read it and I bet other people on this board wants to as well.
Nathan Diaz
MC-kun wants to go to mecha school but is rejected due to "health reasons"
So instead of waiting around for a super special awesome only one in its existence mech that for whatever reasons only that makes it possible for him to attend the school handed to him on a silver platter
He decides to Build a super special awesome only one in its existence mech that for whatever reasons only that makes it possible for him to attend the school
Gabriel Taylor
A mob hitman finds out he has inoperable cancer and only a year left to live. Deciding to live his life to the fullest he cuts his ties to organized crime and finally confesses his feelings to the cute girl at the cafe. They hit it off well and go on a trip to Okinawa, where he's spotted by an old enemy. This person believes the MC is after his life and hires a group of thugs to go after him, resulting in a bloodbath when the MC takes them down. Word of this reaches his old association who interpret it as him having gone in to business with their rivals, and to punish his disloyalty they send after him a quirky group of hitmen, some of who have history with him. The MC desperately tries to play the part of a retired salary man in love to keep his girl from realizing what is happening while taking on his old associates.
Josiah Ross
Having a cute 100+ year old loli as the love interest.
William Edwards
super simplified version of what i'm working on
>Medieval tiems knights and shit with magic! >Be boy >Meet Gurl >Gurl does music and shit >Boy wants to be knight >Boy go in military camp for knights >Gurl learns music with magic >months later >Done training >Takes apprenticeship with knight >Boy kidnapp cause he dumbfuck >Boy tortured become useless >Boy rescue by whoever >Bout to get kicked from family for being fggt >Gurl steps in and does his job >Girl goes to military camp >boy no memory forget Gurl >Gurl take lineage >Boy send to countryside with daddys money >Meets new girl >Everyone hates her >She a witch bitch >Everyone hates witches apparently >Boy hangs out with her cause fuck it >Boy forget alot memory problems >Shes a cunt to him >Village thinks boy is being manipulated >Go kill girl and burn her house down >girl almost ded >Boy save girl >boy ask girl to travel with him >says yes >Boy still forget alot even about girl >Girl make vow to make boy always remember her >By constantly telling him she loves him >Boy and girl travel >meanwhile other gurl is in military being marysue number#1 >Meets the couple again >she got cucked by a bitchwitch
[yo give me your thoughts]
Mason Gonzalez
super simplified version of what i'm working on
>Medieval tiems knights and shit with magic! >Be boy >Meet Gurl >Gurl does music and shit >Boy wants to be knight >Boy go in military camp for knights >Gurl learns music with magic >months later >Done training >Takes apprenticeship with knight >Boy kidnapp cause he dumbfuck >Boy tortured become useless >Boy rescue by whoever >Bout to get kicked from family for being fggt >Gurl steps in and does his job >Girl goes to military camp >boy no memory forget Gurl >Gurl take lineage >Boy send to countryside with daddys money >Meets new girl >Everyone hates her >She a witch bitch >Everyone hates witches apparently >Boy hangs out with her cause fuck it >Boy forget alot memory problems >Shes a cunt to him >Village thinks boy is being manipulated >Go kill girl and burn her house down >girl almost ded >Boy save girl >boy ask girl to travel with him >says yes >Boy still forget alot even about girl >Girl make vow to make boy always remember her >By constantly telling him she loves him >Boy and girl travel >meanwhile other gurl is in military being marysue number#1 >Meets the couple again >she got cucked by a bitchwitch
[yo give me your thoughts]
Dylan Davis
I've got some revision to do, but I'll oblige. Keep in mind, these are the thoughts of a morning and night person, a bare bones thing before I clean it up. I can give you any "normal" loli, at least.
Colton Hall
You have to work on explaining things. Is everyone going to post what they're working on?
Jonathan Miller
Share story son, either way we're gonna bash it! no shame!
Jason Jackson
Keit-ai already has a TV Tropes page, so stop posting it.
The main character of our story is a man who has, since childhood, had a single dream: to be the most exciting announcer in the world. Throughout the series he seeks out sporting events, street fights and even battles between superheroes and supervillains so he can narrate the events and collecting various quirky side-characters to act as an all-knowing council of commentators regardless of the situation. The first episode would be him over-dramatically explaining a battle between two stag-beetles back in elementary school. The OP and ED features images of the great narrators like Morgan Freeman and Sir David Attenborough.
Noah Allen
Damn! did someone do this?!
Jordan Cook
>Girl becomes a truck driver in Japan >Starts killing high school kids left and right >Boss promotes her and starts assigning her in more populated areas >Turns out boss was actually the head of the Isekai world and wanted more people there >Girl promises to shut her yap and does her job if she got a raise >Series ends as she happily drives her truck to Tokyo
Xavier Wright
Insane mercenaries taking dangerous jobs and utilize heavy dosage of firepower and magic to finish those jobs. Black Lagoon 2.0 with less melodramatic and giving a shit about muh morals and far more octane.
Colton Allen
>What makes Light Novels seem terrible to Americans compared to the Japanese is how they view tropes.
Actually no, It is actually the surprising lack of detail during the scene that puts them off. You can find all the tropes in the manga section of the bookstore, that is also where the LN's are kept. However I find the real reason to be morality because the books are for teens even though the content can be more so beyond the age rating if the publisher chooses not the censor it.
Chase Gray
A hand shot up, followed by a few others, and my eyes followed the length of the first girl's arm with dread. All of the lolis had fantastically smooth skin from what I'd seen so far, but only one happened to have the entirety of her arms exposed. I wondered why the blonde girl wasn't just interrupting this time, and gave her the benefit of the doubt by calling on her. I pointed, and she began to talk while resting her cheek on her desk and dangling her hands off the edge of her desk. "Hey, you have a girlfriend, don't you?" she asked during those momentary pauses that fell upon the whispers of the class, which added more impact to her words. I couldn't hear an obvious cruelty in her voice, of course, since it was so damn innocent sounding, but I took a wild guess that she was grinning in that hidden position between her arms. "Hmmmmm," I said in a voice about an octave higher, in order to be funny, as a distraction to let me hide the pain. She perked up to join the rest of the class in laughing at the unexpected answer, and I felt distracted for a moment too, smiling. I could handle that sensitive question, couldn't I? I probably just wallow in loneliness, rather than actually being alone. "Alright, actually, that's a big league no. I haven't had a girl like me since middle school, and never did anything. I didn't even get to-" I stopped abruptly, feeling a chlorinated wave of feeling go up my nose. That lack of air feeling. "Do it?" I turned to see, surprise surprise, the blond girl smiling again. I sighed, but this time, the brown-haired girl with the peaked bangs shockingly leapt to my defense. "Why, you...he's a shy new teacher who isn't going to play a bunch of c-crap all the time! We might even have fun in his class, and you're just bullying him!" She hesitated to say "crap", and turned to me with a look of concern after her outburst, as if she had insulted me instead of the now-dead nigger. I mouthed, "It's okay" and finished with a weak smile.
Josiah Jenkins
ITT: ideas that might be stolen by Japan
Eli Evans
Steal away, faggot. Execution in the end is what matters anyway.
Mason Lopez
>Not wanting them to steal your idea and not watching them crash and burn because they have no vision for your idea while you actually build up the true story dated all the way back on your first document save before the date they published it.
It's like you don't want them to feel the burn while you do the last dicking.
Evan Hill
This would be that excerpt, by the way. Sorry for not specifying. I'd apologize for writing too, but I'm waiting to see how I'll be judged, so not yet.
Isaac Sanchez
I hope your girls will be cute and well drawn by your illustrator.
You're gonna need it
Justin Powell
>automation is going to take everyone's jobs
>In Japan there are not enough people to fill out all the jobs so automation just fills in the holes to save the economy
I don't get it, automation's "taking jobs" and Japan's "birth rate crisis" cancel each other out, no?
Blake Morris
Guess who's illustrating too? I'll work harder, though, thanks for the honesty.
Carter Kelly
No because they'll go extinct and leave behind a bunch of sexy machine women who need men to fulfill their primary functions, leading to a massive war of conquest as the Japanese Nymphobots invade the world seeking cocks.
Dylan Hughes
It's just painful to read. But at least you write. I've fantasized about writing my own things for nearly 9 years now and have made nothing.
Lucas Martinez
Ain't this just the episodes of index where no action happens?
Sebastian Campbell
I've written hundreds of pages of shitty smut fanfic for people on the internet over the past couple of years, you can do it man!
William Bell
So they'll go no further than China since there's tens of millions of bachelors without any hope of getting a GF in China.
Caleb Rogers
hELL YEAH!
Charles Diaz
I want my waifu to get an anime with the best animation so everyone sees how beautiful and great she is
Ryan Watson
I believe one way or another Sup Forums will spawn something that wont just be left unfished like KS
That being said where do you publish your works? I have made a few pages worth of stories and am coming to the point that Its time to be hardened by the fires of harsh criticism (much like being in this place in general)
Leo Morales
>tfw the only thing I've ever written is a monster girl smut fic for a friend that she requested at 0200 >tfw I want to share it despite how badly written it is
John Bennett
Dude post'em, even if you fail! you're always gonna fail, failure happens! Just keep going, cause maybe one day you'll succeed now post'em bitch!
Benjamin Ramirez
>spoiler What a coinky dinky, that's exactly what I write about too.
Christopher Rivera
Pastebin. I put up a link to the story in the appropriate thread.
Isaac King
Want to read it? It's about 5 or so pages worth, and at least 2000 words. My friend thought it was good, but her opinion is probably skewered by our friendship. I just want to know what people think
Wyatt Lewis
Someone writ some smut, i'm bored and i just drew this. Make a world for her
Ayden Edwards
do it fggt
Caleb Wright
Let's see it so we can mock it.
Adam Rodriguez
>MC is a man down on his luck, nearly homeless and shit out of luck when it comes to money >gets the opportunity to participate in a race via lottery ticket; the vehicle is supplied to contenders for purposes of maintaing a stock car racing environment, and all he has to do is pick himself up and go to race >race is either a local event or is part of some larger government structure that places priority on racing for some reason, who the fuck cares >20 total participants in this lotto race >top 5 places get cash prizes, and MC wins the 4th place prize just barely >MC gets a single race sponsor, netting him just enough money to expand his career and buy his own car/tune it up a bit to participate in future races >daily struggles of keeping such a lifestyle up, along with a steady progression as the MC gets better cars and more income, showing the MC rise up from nearly homeless to one of the best racers in his region
Ryder Rogers
Eurobeat or nah?
William Bell
pastebin.com/RcAqiZfB I will admit that I am not the best writer, and writing this early in the morning has led to many mistakes. Regardless, have fun
Hunter Moore
Eurobeat if it fits, but definitely not full on Initial D sequences of racing. Initial D focuses mostly on 1v1 street races, but this kind of series would probably focus more on larger competitor races, with a few 1v1 races sprinkled in to show the MC vs a main competitor or something
Dylan Gutierrez
I'll be back after reading user
Hudson Jackson
A suggestion I would make is to lower your use of adverbs and make your sentences easier to read. You don't use any passive voice which is great so I can at least praise you for that. But like I said, your sentences are unnecessarily long and don't necessarily enhance the experience by doing so. Descriptions are important but not at the cost of a reader's enjoyment.
An example would be the following sentence:
>I couldn't hear an obvious cruelty in her voice, of course, since it was so damn innocent sounding, but I took a wild guess that she was grinning in that hidden position between her arms.
This sentence is a pain to read, what is more important than your command of the English language is the readability of it. Your goal should be that a 6th grader should be able to pick up your book and read it while a grown adult can take those ideas he read and dissect it into more meaningful ideas.
A good way to fix it could be like this:
>She didn't sound like she was mocking me. Her voice was too innocent to seem cruel. Despite this I still felt like she was hiding a grin behind her small arms.
That one sentence could be split up into three smaller ones instead. The idea still remains while the reader doesn't feel exhausted after reading it.
Kayden Long
What a twist. Where you going with this, fool?
Christopher Gomez
If I were to make something I'd just create my own thread and post it here or derail someone else's thread like the one page thread/drawthread.
Brandon Cruz
"after she finished her meal"
>to be honest i kinda lost it
Samuel Perry
Dragons and humans fight long war. Ends in uneasy alliance, heavily skewed toward dragons.
Fast forward, society is medieval kingdom, with those favored with dragons granted magic and those without. Dargons control most of society.
MC is a Manaless, finds a cave with strange decaying buildings, foundries, seemingly dwarven-looking stuff.
Comes home to find his village razed and a manhunt after a dragon egg was crushed.
Barely escapes, falls in with small rebellion. Leads them to the cave to find out that it's full of steam/electro punk pre-War tech. Turns out the dragons forced a technological regression back to the Medieval ages.
Wyatt Harris
Ive posted a brief overview of my current work in a thread long ago but Ill post it again to get roasted again and receive insight
A criminal genius on the run after all his successful plots were ruined by none other than his subordinates. He doesnt take it against them and merely considers it the constant chance of something going wrong. Finally cornered he goes off in a blaze of glory by blowing up his last plans target.
Drifting in what seems like an endless void he contemplates all he has done what he could have done and what lies ahead. But most of all, he felt really satisfied.
Like a glass shattering, the endless void is broken and what seems to be something like the vastness of space comes to his view. Anticipating that this was the end he accepts it willingly.
Feeling like an eternity has passed he casually opened his eyes like it was merely a new day. He then realizes that he is no longer in the void nor the broken skyscraper. He was in a simple house. Dusty, unkempt, with little warmth in his surroundings. Hes not nowhere anymore.
I'll skip and just tell you he is reincarnated into europe and goes on to become hitlers childhood friend. Being the criminal mastermind he is he though what could possibly happen if WW2 went on for a little longer
And so I quote " Well this is a rather jnteresting surprise as he spoke to young adolf"
Its a WIP and im considering turning it into Not-Germany and completely set it into a fictional world
Now, shoot me now. Cmooon
Julian Cook
It's just a one shot. The story was suppose to be that the doctor she loved died a while ago, and she is trying to clone him to bring him back. Wanting to go further than just his physical form, she places the clones in a familiar situation. When they inevitably fail due to their imperfections, she disposes of their corpse and tries again with another clone. The clone in the story is the farthest she has come in a while. I put too much time into this.
Connor Gomez
This is genius level writing. >spoiler Yeah I go that. I'm just trying to gently nudge you into doing more.
Samuel Ortiz
Any criticisms? I want to get better at writing as well.
Christian Williams
So wait? She killed him, because he was a failure? Explain why was he a failure?
Nathan Jenkins
Look at I apologize if I am derailing the thread
Ryder Bell
Besides the plot, i liked the structure and it had alot of imagery lol. I'm just a little confused because the ending was more of a cliff hanger.
Keep it up and make something great man
Evan Robinson
I'm not an art critic. Here, have a hipster snek to make up for it.
Bentley Moore
Conceptually, that's almost half Youjo Senki.
Juan Jackson
Im getting mixed signals here
Camden Harris
>mixed signals Explain yourself.
Gavin Bennett
Amusingly I found out of Youjo senki after making like 3 chapters of the work. I for one enjoyed Youjo senki but using divine beings, genderbending isnt to my taste. I still like y senki though
Andrew Martinez
well i say you're doing fine, just make a story, something you'll be proud of
Jaxson Long
Isekai Harem trash, except the MC manages to pull his Glasses-kun best bro along for the ride and they yuk it up.
The side plot is just Glassesbro playing football manager 2016 with the MC's harem, who just wants to be left alone and go questing.
Connor Hill
>Battle Harem school set up >No 1 vs 1 tournies >Free For All Royal Rumble set-up >Protagonist makes friends with crafty ring-leader >Series focuses on cheating the system with a few serious fights in between >Bro antics with dual male protags Throw some unorthodox weapons in there like a Halberd for the MC
Connor Lewis
Thanks for reading and providing feedback, anons. I'll try writing another story later
Jayden Jones
>Guy gets isekai'd >defeats the demon king >becomes the next demon king >new guy gets isekai'd to defeat the demon king >turns out that anyone that gets isekai'd to defeat the demon king is destined to become the next demon king and get defeated by another person who was isekai'd
story follows the demon king as he tries to break the cycle
David Myers
I'm thinking of a story where a knight accidentally summons an extremely powerful demon. He can't kill her due to her being too powerful, and she can't kill him because of demon rules or something. What can I add to this?
Jackson Wood
I always imagined a series with an extremely devout paladin being followed around by a succubus who really wants a pure loving relationship with him but he just doesn't want any of it.
Jordan Taylor
Sex.
Jose Thompson
>MC is an otaku NEET loser >he is obsessed with this one battle harem show >he likes this one girl who he dubs as the best girl >and he absolutely despises this one girl who he calls the worst >he shitposts about how much he hates her on 2ch all day >one day he somehow wakes up in this shows universe with a battle academy invite in his hand >it's the first episode >knowing the show inside out, he makes it to the battle academy to enroll >to his horror, everybody in the harem ignores/hates him since they all wants the harem MC's dick >everybody except the worst girl
