I have had made my manga for contests of japan. What is the opinion of the Sup Forums? I want to have posted now

I have had made my manga for contests of japan. What is the opinion of the Sup Forums? I want to have posted now.

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nani

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Girl is cute. I like it.

Cute Girl

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this is zen-zen daijobu. shows potential.

god speed japanon. and keep up the hard work, even if you're not successful this time around.

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your manga is gomi

ワンパンチ

data big make two page

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10/10 its okay

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Looks good, was your artstyle inspired by any mangaka in particular?

格好いい
good work user-sensei.

My complaint is that on some panels some characters look copypasted in from other works

For example girl in the last panel on this page

Reminds me of Nube a bit.

おわり

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I want draw like 村田雄介 or the 岩代俊明, but I can not

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Sorry I can not understand

nice job OP

now draw the porn

The art is neat, I wanna sex that girl.

MIBちゃんかわいい

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maji kuso

nice....nice....

Looks good, but you do need backgrounds for some panels senpai.

The art is good enough.

どうもありがとうございます

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Okay I do

please help make manga good

I liked it. I hope you do well in the contest. Best of luck japanon.

最後のパネルの少女は他のシリースのチャラを似ていすぎる

Dude I would read the fuck out of something with an artstyle like that.

looks like some good ura sunday shit

girl needs bigger breasts

Guys, if he doesn't speak english well you cannot use vulgar interjections like "shit" or "fucking" because they will make the machine translation sound negative even when they are used in a positive sense

Ignore this poster.

違う

シリーズか

Nice

I don't know much about that comic yet but i think you should add trigger discipline , profesionalls dont hold their finger on the trigger

how do they shoot then

With their minds.

OP, do you like flat chests?

Your artstyle is beautiful

くそ食らえ

Where are the backgrounds?
Don't go full Kubo until you are actually serialized

I want to stick my dick in your art.

Art is too sloppy and boring for no backgrounds

How long have you been drawing? what's your name? I want to follow your series whenever you start getting serialized and tell my friends I spoke to you personally for internet points.

泉こなたが好きです

Many thanks

Did you draw this with computer? Looks neat.

I don't have good tastes in things, the only things I can see that should be changed is there's too many panels with no background, even a simple gradient would help

You are supposed to keep the finger off the trigger unless you are pointing at something you WANT to destroy.
I don't understand japanese but on the first panel the girl looks like she isn't sure if she should shoot yet, in such situation normal cop would keep finger next to the trigger like on this picture.
If im wrong just keep it in mind in the future. Your drawings are super nice!

What manga contest user?

There's some strong Big O feeling on the male character.

Top panel building BG needs some work. It just doesn't look right, it looks bland to me. Probably need some toning in the panel and readjustment on the front building. Probably some signboards to add more life to it.

Seriously it's hard to tell but that panel just doesn't do it for me.

>泉こなたが好きです

I do not understand Japanese but I like your art.

I draw from a little while. I don't have mangaka name now

Some part of the manga, more with the ink

Jump Manga Contest
And I try make better building next contest

Can't read it, but it seems interesting plot wise.
Good art.

to add to that user, the finger can be kept over the trigger guard until ready to fire

keeping the finger on the trigger when not ready to fire is a "rookie" mistake

Maybe someone translate? Sorry my English not good I cannot translate the manga

to add to that user, the finger can be kept over the trigger guard until ready to fire

keeping the finger on the trigger when not ready to fire is a "rookie" mistake

her handgun grip is incorrect as well, her left hand should be held over right hand on the grip

you expect me to trust some nail biter?

What's the girl's name? She's cute.

>Jump Manga Contest

I wish you all the best.

And I need to add that you have damn good line work.

how about this?

also the 1911 is not drawn properly

I don't think you're talking to OP. OP seems to answer several persons at once and his english is worse.

the slide stop, plunger tube, and safety should be on the right side of the gun not the left

does peeled side skin give away that it's a nail biter?

My Jap is garbage, but the first page is about MIB-chan threatening the criminal and saying she'll shoot him. MIB-kun tells her not to do it here and then the criminal says that she should try and insults her as Mesuzaru(?). Something like a female monkey. He's basically calling her degenerate.

Main girl need more OPPAI

Sure mate I was actually refraining from doing so out of respect to you but why not.

>We're the Men In Black!

>I'll shoot if you don't stop!!

>Hey, don't actually shoot

>Don't worry, I'm just bluffing

>He!

>Just try it bitch-ape

>Prepare to die!!

>Aah... You ended up shooting after all...
>Don't ignore an order from your superiors, idiot

>But he said some really mean things!

>What are you going to do if he uses the smoke to get away?

>That's...

>He purposely lured us out here (?) (I can't read this panel very well)

>Desu!

>You've chosen to reveal your true form then...

>Giant-chinned alien!!

>Think you can get away without paying your bills (dine and dash)

>That sort of rebellious attitude!!

>Do you want to get sent back to your native star?!

>Suzuki is that you? what are you doing here?

Ah... That guy's from my class

>Watanabe!!!

>Fu-...

>Yare Yare...

>Have you no concept of friendship... (I think?)

>An alien with a zero percent probability of rehabilitation is...

>This guy.

>Just when did he get here?!

>Must be sent back home!!!

>As expected of senpai

>Fun (soundeffect, not the word)

>.........Shit.......

>What the fuck was that? Some kind of film shoot?!

>Eh
>Suzuki, you were a youtuber!?

>No... Uhh this is...

>To erase the memories of any witness

>Set the dial on the glove to 3 and...

>Punch!

>Bepu!?

>Situation codename Q has been neutralized
>We're heading back to base

>Ahh

>Also send an ambulance our way....

It's a fun story you've got here mr. mangaka-sensei, thanks for posting it here for us.

>finger in trigger first
>finger disapears on the same page from the side view
>buildings are super bland
Looks fine though. I hope you win

Can I post my "manga" in this thread too?

お世話になりました

art is fine af

I think you should add some simple background or dust clouds to the second panel (where girl touches ground with her hand and dude is in front of her)
Here as well at the bottom.

the opposite side should be bare

your drawings are still far closer to accurate than most manga

your manga was great, good luck with the contest

yeah I was just going to post all this anyways

Nice, dude. I only think that you have to work more on the background, it's kind of plane, but besides that, it looks good.

Cute girl, I want to cum inside her.

Go ahead, my man. I'll read it.

The art is good, but the panels and cameraplacement are boring.

For example the camera could have been placed on his leg to make the scene more dynamic. I have no good examples right now, expect maybe this picture.

私のマンガの物語をかいてください。

Wonderful composition OP.

Before we can critique in a better light, can you tell us the criteria of the manga contest?
What are you suppose to present to the judge?
what is the performance of your manga is based upon?

I hope you win Japananon! I'll be rooting for you!

Well shit, I just started the project for like a week, so all I have is this promotion art.
And....

No problem mate, make sure to make another thread if you win the contest so we can all celebrate together.

The story of chapter isn't exiting. Nothing interesting happen.

Small question.

This comic was for the contest, right? Do you have a setup for it? An introduction page or something?

somehow i expected someone would post this

the character sheet for the main girls

>cute broken robot healing music

Picked up.

Blonde black suit girl best girl.

Do you want our aproval? Draw her in a lewd pose, just the white shirt, socks and necktie

すみません。おっしゃったことが聞き取れませんでした

>starting with promotional art
That's cute, but not very productive, user-chan. Have you already practiced giving autographs?
Anyway it looks great and promising.

to add in, OP what kind of critique you want to hear from us about your manga?

What program you use?

We have been guided by real mangaka to make manga short. Best Manga Story and Art win the contest. No Rules what story you do.

Do you like lolis?