I'm working on my first rap song, heres what I got so far. Thoughts?

I'm working on my first rap song, heres what I got so far. Thoughts?

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youtube.com/watch?v=vqkN6NVaggs
vocaroo.com/i/s1uHUFbD2LPI
youtube.com/watch?v=U-hgpeSGDgc
twitter.com/AnonBabble

don't make this thread again it wasn't funny the first time

sup bones

i'm pretty sure this is a joke thread but your syllables are wack, impossible to flow over those lyrics

this is every white person's first attempt at writing rap

I'm a lyrical spiritual miracle individual

i aint gonna reply if this is rhetorical

>listens to run the jewels once

Next line:
I suck on testicle

youtube.com/watch?v=vqkN6NVaggs

Your flow is whack and abysmal
When I'll smack you around it'll be biblical
back to the future when I was high on adderall
I pissed my dick off and shat in the urinal

I'M A SPIRITUAL LYRICAL INDIVIDUAL MIRACLE LYRICAL INDIVIDUAL

im so tired im like snoricle
fucka bitch then im phantasmagorical
swag on my balls, orical

If you say "my rhymes" or "my bars" ur automatically trash

u just said both guess ur trash

This whole thread full of trash lyrics
wtf, guys? I thought you were more woke than this.

my rhymes be metaphorical (8)
don't reply it's rhetorical (8)
I'm spittin truth like it's historical (10)
seeing visions like I'm the oracle (10)
I'm everywhere you're boxed in like categorical (13)
my flow like a story it's allegorical (12)

stop it

>applying poetic restrictions to a musical art form
pretty embarrassing, family

why do you think "bars" are called "bars"

it's literally more important for syllables to fit correctly in musical form due to the further restriction of needing to spit the lyrics within the constraints of a beat

why do you have a trip

I sound stuffy as hell but I tried really hard to flow to what the OP wrote to demonstrate how difficult those syllables make it and this is what I got

vocaroo.com/i/s1uHUFbD2LPI

>why do you have a trip
because I'm the most popular hip-hop artist on this board
>it's literally more important for syllables to fit correctly in musical form due to the further restriction of needing to spit the lyrics within the constraints of a beat
number of syllables in a line =/= number of beats
>why do you think "bars" are called "bars"
don't insult me

Congrats you managed to say absolutely nothing with the most basic of cringe worthy rhyme schemes

>bob wire

> I'm the most popular hip-hop artist on this board
that would be montie

link me to something of yours?

You sound like Bert from Bert and Ernie

that's what a flow is, genius
a division or subdivision of the number of beats in a bar by a consistent number of syllables

just stop posting

It doesn't have to be consistent. Maybe in the 80s but rappers stretch and manipulate syllables all the time these days. Are you ignorant of the entirety of hip hop post-Rakim? I recommend you listen to OutKast or something.

of course it doesn't have to be
nothing in art has to be anything, including good
thanks for the rec dude

its muh dick
take a lick but don't trip
it be spittin that wack ass dope shit
when i cum ill give ya bean a flick

>Homosexual MF DOOM:
I fuck man butts, thrust on ham cuts
Pry, tuck, jam nuts up on man sluts
Canned spam lands two feet from Jan's cunt
Hand shan't grab, cooties fucked Dan up

My lines are so basic
Your girl on that bass trip
Not to name names
But yo bitch in my basement
Her face is depraved
Yet she jumps on my dick
Come on by I'll show you the tip

>by a consistent number of syllables
that's where you're wrong, friendo

here you go, bruh
youtube.com/watch?v=U-hgpeSGDgc

Why is this so accurate

>my flow like a story, it's allegorical

God Hip Hop is the most banal thing in the fucking world. So many rappers would be nothing without their producers.

haha yeah woo hoo
yeah uh-huh
we got london on the track
nigga
woo hoo yeah son
haha woo

>Aesop Rock Takes An Algebra Class:
Binomial coefficients and complex number formulas
Im coating notebooks totally focused on a hyperbola
The teach is speeding over cause I chatted till the class was done
I try to find our angle angle but Pythagorus is mad at us

You realize this isn't from an actual successful rapper, right?

>Earl Sweatshirt Is Suspicious About 9/11:
It's been over a decade since the towers left, left us towerless
And I just used to blame al-Qaeda for their cowardice
When truthfully I missed the facts since I was just a kid
A bomb destroyed the pentagon, we never saw a plane that hit

I don't fucking care about your accomplishments so don't treat the listener like they should be

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pretty fire desu