I wrote a poem for my 18 yo classmate who I plan to confess my love to. Tell me what you think, please.
I love a girl with bright blue eyes Her tongue it speaks of love not lies If she'd command me down on her I'd quickly fall then on my knees And would not mind I aim to please Till she would like a kitten purr
I love a girl with fire hair Her soft lips touch I could not bear around my cock for more than one a quarter of an hour but If I could stick it in her butt Then all my worries would be gone
I love a girl with virgin thighs A redhaired maid with bright blue eyes And speak to her of love not lust However if she seeks to know Physical love, a hearty plough My nut in her I'd gladly bust
you're reading that for someone you love? what is it, a love letter from your cock? don't be an idiot.
Chase Williams
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Owen Wright
and the ugly people losers that smell like poop has no friends and smell like shit
Jeremiah Butler
This is too much effort to put into a joke, user.
Jonathan Robinson
Beautiful OP I am touched
Bentley Rivera
Are you serious?
Hunter Cooper
if its for real... good luck getting laid bud (... could happen) if its a joke, try harder next time.
Michael Rodriguez
dont write a poem grab her ass and say your dicksize only faggots actually have a poem
Charles Harris
Cringe thread
Carson Phillips
Your cock shouts "inexperience", from atop a hill, You believe this poem, shall excite and thrill? She shall laugh, and shout, but not with glee, She'll show your poem, for all to see.
There's the "fag" they'll snigger and snort, that wrote a poem, without a thought, So heed my warning, and cast away your words For they shall plonk down, like ...so ...many..turds
David Lewis
not bad, I wish girls were smart enough to write us that kind of stuff
Hunter Diaz
You really need to learn to count syllables OP
Cameron Lewis
It's that Kip?
Czech em
Anthony Diaz
Oof. That's some top quality cringe material right there, OP.
Easton Wright
you deserve each other
Daniel Hill
Fucking Rimbaud over here
Gabriel Long
What should I change?
Nicholas Russell
Schools if you read that to her.
Parker Harris
We'll graduate soon anyway, so I figured I'll take my chance
Jace Hernandez
My dear fellow, I will write one just for you.
A mote dances, carried hither and thither by your panting breath. A pause ........ as the rod slides deeper, you shudder. Your pulsation increases, veins pumping and heart beating so that it might leave your body. You thrust back.... every inch the newfag.
Angel Morgan
Yeah, looks good man your G2G
Luis Flores
pic related?
Brayden Foster
yeah
Nolan Fisher
Excellent. I appreciate that you took time to use a more sophisticated rhyme scheme than the usual ABAB crap): AAB/CCB is interesting Your scansion is decent, though a but/butt is a lame rhyme, and a little more enjambment would improve the flow. A solid A-. (The funniest part is that I actually am an English professor, and of course nobody will believe me).
Michael Morales
I believe you user-kun :3
Christopher Morris
under-rated post (7/10 would employ if there was a market for shit like this, but there's not)
Josiah Cruz
You're improving.
Oliver Jones
Please do this and film the results.
Jeremiah Martinez
OP don't embarrass yourself. If she sees the amount of failed rhymes in this poem you'll never get her to fuck. Avoid synonyms like but and butt, just sounds shitty when you read aloud. One and gone, are you fuckin kidding me. Know and plough, again, you fuckin kidding? I love a girl with virgin thighs, you better be pretty damn confident about that.
Also, the whole premise sucks dick. Ask her to the movies or some shit like a halfway normal person.
Levi Richardson
But who the hell pronounces "plough" to rhyme with "know"? The purring kitten thing was stupid too, especially the word ordering, even making allowances for poetic license. Also "one a quarter"??? Plus attempting to rhyme one with gone, which is only possible in Middle English, not Modern English, and it's highly doubtful she speaks Middle English. Also describing her as a virgin is a bit presumptuous on his part. Not that this could ever be considered a serious thread... nobody could be socially retarded enough to use this as a mating call.
You will potentially be embarrassing yourself in front of people you will see often at work, at college, at gatherings.
Cringey shit like this will be the first thing they think when they see you.
Asher Wilson
Aurii?
Thomas Hall
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John Bell
You can't confess your love for her unless you are in an established relationship. You don't love her. Even though the OP is a troll as the poem is sex predator tier, that needed stating in case anyone forgot or didn't know.
Lucas Collins
>I love a bitch with bright blue eyes >I wanna put my tongue between her thighs >She might look away cause i have Downs >but I eat pussy better than most of you clowns >And I would not mind I aim to please >Just gimme a chance between them knees
>I love a ho with no pussy hair >Little pink lips, not a grizzly bear >My hand around my cock for an hour or more >I edge until I can't then watch my semen pour >I'd raped that ass and cum in her butt >But I fap alone cause I got no guts
>I love a little girl with virgin thighs >I'd take her to my basement, keep her locked inside >And speak to her of love not lust >Chain around her ankle because I don't trust >Rape rape rape just every day >Then the other kids won't think I'm gay
Josiah Allen
-OP, ten years from now
Connor Walker
OP now
Leo Gutierrez
>/10 would employ if there was a market for shit like this, but there's not)
I like you.
Who can fathom, the thought of one, that could make a lady swoon, with a simple word, a sultry wink, a kiss beneath the moon. A kind user, with simple ways, belying a gallant heart, who with but a simple word... appreciates my art.
Daniel Clark
Yes, better.
Dylan Reed
suck a truck load of fuck and let her buck you cuck till with luck the muck comes off your puck-er
Elijah Parker
aaaaaaaa rhyming scheme
Nathaniel Gray
does cuck rhyme with luck? I think it rhymes with book.
Jeremiah Baker
Cuck =/= cook
Charles Martin
7\10 would not do better myself
Zachary Cruz
>My nut in her I'd gladly bust he's trolling , fuckers
Gabriel Brown
Indeed it does rhyme with book. Cuckold stems from cuckoo (famous for entering the nest of another with the intention to deceive).
Eli James
That, or he's fucking lovably nuts. I used to do stupid shit like this all the time in high school.
Gabriel Howard
ffs op, confessing your love will just crush your chances how ever they had stand. Girls want indipendent men, not needy boys. This is huge turnoff. Go to a gym, get training (maybe ato a gym for 6 month) to get some self confidence about yourself and then just ask her directly out
Christian Campbell
Don't say love. girls get weirded out
don't rape her either
Ethan Hernandez
this, OP, grow some fucking balls
Carter Robinson
god, that's beautiful, I wept.
Print it out in really flowery font, then wrap it around your cock and present it to her that way. She'll probably start crying too
Jackson Thomas
if you're right, there's a major chance of him swiching schools very soon
OP, if you're still here, i know grills are 𝓼𝓹𝓮𝓬𝓲𝓯𝓲𝓬 but that will just earn you a weirdo badge
Michael Martinez
But if you do rape her, raper her gently and caringly, and make sure to tell her you're only doing it because you love her.
Evan Wright
>My nut in her I'd gladly bust topkek
probably won't appreciate it, but I do.
Adrian Roberts
Yeah, she'll dig it and say things like: "I'm so into artsy-fartsy guys and ATM, we'll be happy ever after."
Austin Anderson
Dont do it, trust me, the girl will hate you.
Tyler Powell
she probably already does.
if he's at the poetry-writing stage of his obsession, she's probably already noticed him creeping
Jonathan Bailey
>speaking from experience someone's speaking from experience here
Camden Young
Do it, user. You will forever go down I'm history as "Thee who busted a nut in the firey maiden."