>when you fuck up this badly
guys how do I keep writing this I'm fucked in the head over it
Composing
Jaxson Kelly
Ethan Peterson
>throwing as many different types of notes as possible in
>odd time signature THAT CHANGES
>accidentals
stop showing off user, you know damn well no-one here knows about composition
Jonathan Wright
Fuck really? are accidentals and odd meter really above Sup Forums's head? I figured this'd be the board if any where some people could give real advice.
Hudson Murphy
No, it's not -- give me half an hour, I'm doing laundry; will you still be around? ;)
Julian Perry
Ok OP, I made a recording on my phone... now tell me how to get this shit off of my phone and onto vocaroo or something and we can discuss it.
Connor Cruz
Here it is:
vocaroo.com
Now tell me why you want to save any of this and why you want to go to C major/a minor.
Why not follow the same rhythmic pattern in measure 5? Why the odd number of measures?
What is this supposed to feel like?
Grayson Cox
well for starters it looks like you're trying for a 18th century esque composition, but in measure 3 you have a chain of dissonances that don't resolve in the outer voices and parallel 5ths between the bass and alto. You might want to read up on basic voice leading.
But I'll lay it out for you
>dissonances are both approached and resolved.
So the last beat of measure 2, all voices are consonant and then at the start of m. 3 you drop the bass down to a B which creates a dissonance between the B and the A. Instead of moving both down, perhaps hold the B constant and move both the A and the F# to G, or move the A to G and the F# to another note that's consonant with both G and B, like D.
>no parallel 5ths (or octaves, but if you're just trying to double a voice for emphasis it's ok)
don't do this unless you're trying to be Debussy or composing a more modern composition
There are more rules, but you can get by with just those. When putting down a progression of chords, think to yourself "where does this want to lead?" Every chord has a place and a purpose.
Leo Cruz
Oh damn son. I'll post this right now so you at least know I'm listening, I'll follow it up in a minute once I'm done writing
Thomas Cook
>don't do this unless you're trying to be Debussy
Doesn't everyone want to be Debussy? :)
Landon King
well I hope OP wasn't trying to be Debussy because he wasnt doing a good job