Screen Writing Thread

I just wrote a 25 page script for a dark situation comedy about what happens when a maid and escort have their client die on them.

Tell me if it's shit.

dropbox.com/s/gdkqvrog4tsl3s2/A Touch Too Much.pdf?dl=0


Also post any writings you have.

user, I... I just don't get it. I mean I do not understand your story. It's also written like a shooting script. Are you actually making this? I like certain things about it, there are some nice ideas but it just feels like there's no real point to it. I might be missing something. You have a couple of interesting characters, some dialogue is good some is meh. Also you put your address on Sup Forums

>posting your new script idea to a public forum
Literal fucking idiot

yeah its shit

Honestly I have posted a LOT of ideas on Sup Forums in these threads over the years, and not only have none of them been stolen, I have received a lot of great advice and anons' thoughts have helped me develop my work and become a better writer. Your idea is not worth shit. Even the script itself is not worth shit, especially a short like this. Everyone has ideas, every idea can be good, no idea is original. They're not worth stealing, you can get millions of ideas for free just by thinking. You sound insecure and you probably think your writing is hot shit so of course you would never post it because it would get stolen and someone else would win the Oscar, right? No one's gonna steal your shit buddy, no one gives a fuck

maybe the stuff you posted is so shit even max landis wouldnt steal it hahahhahaha

I'm currently writing an X-Files and American Psycho crossover.

This hurts to read

>I have received a lot of great advice and anons' thoughts have helped me develop my work and become a better writer.
If you are OP, I'd hate to see how much worse your writing was originally before you sought Sup Forums's advice.

I'm not OP, but I promise I'm bad too. I was going through some shit I wrote when I was like 15 and just starting out, and it is so absurdly bad I almost couldn't finish it. I have been embarrassed for the past 3 days after re-reading it. Like I'm ashamed to go outside.

Nice, how's that gonna work? Are you the same user who's posted a few times about writing some X-Files stuff?

>tfw you learn Taxi Driver was written in 5 days
>tfw you learn The Breakfast Club was written in 2 days(!)
>Clerks was written in 2 weeks
>Cabin In The Woods, 3 days
>Herzog says it shouldn't take any longer than a week
>Max Landis writes new scripts hourly
>tfw can't finish a fucking script to save my life even when working at it for months
AHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!

I know what you mean, the best thing I ever wrote only took me about a month with approximately 2-3 hours of work per week. That was just the first draft though, although all consecutive drafts have been done in single 3-4 hour sessions. It's mostly just procrastination and overthinking that prevent me from getting to the actual writing. I hate myself

I really envy/hate people who are capable of sustained and intentional focus.

The content is fine. Needs a little work, but it's mainly fine. Your formatting and style need some decent improvement. Don't just write exactly what happens, try to make it interesting for the reader. Don't be afraid of using adjectives and exclamation marks. Build the world of the story, don't just explain the action. If it's a comedy, make it fun to read. If it's a thriller, make it tense.

Writers don't improvise all that much.
Usually they're setting down ideas and moods that have been echoing in their head for years beforehand.

You're thinking too hard

>celtx shilling their premium service around every corner while i try to write

god damn, i said no

I come from a creative writing background so when I write action, I tend to go overboard. How much is too much? I read other scripts but it seems like I can never get across what I -really- want to get across without taking up four or five sentences.

Try Trelby. It was fine for me as a free alternative when I was using it a few years ago. I think it's open source so it's probably gotten a bit better since then.

I sometimes get way too specific and write out everything that happens. But that's because what I write, I intend to direct. I've learned to curb that habit though by writing stage plays. Sometimes for the stage you write a very large section of action (describing the set, characters, etc.) so that's different from a screenplay. But mainly action is implied through dialogue for a play, or it's very briefly mentioned as quickly as possible. I try to find a balance of that and my long winded specificity when writing a screenplay. Remember, the script is just the outline. The director and the actors get to come up with what ACTUALLY happens, the writer pretty much just gives them suggestions. This is more true in theatre, though, since every director will block a play in their own way. Still a good rule for scripts in general though, I think

I hate it too