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LIVING THE DREAM - REASON TO LIVE

grab a band-aid because it's about to get edgy


im a fucking wreck
and I hate my life
existential crisis? give me fucking sense

why do fucking bother?
i have no friends
my social life is dead
spending all my days on the fucking internet

mentally unstable
abusing drugs everyday
my girl is fucked in the head
and living with her best friend 300km away

fuck my life, it hurts so bad
get c.ucked by some guy
cause i just can't get up
give me fucking sense

im a fucking wreck
20 years of age
living with my parents
fucking year since i talked to someone else

living, vegetate
this started when i finished school
best fucking grades, but i didn't get to college
cause, give me fucking sense

ain't got got no money
buying drugs, selling drugs
i'm slowly loosing touch
I lie in bed every damn night
asking myself what the fuck im doing with my life

I don't know what to do
everything just suck
never wanted to make self-harm

3 years bodybuilding scheme
strict diet, training 4 days a week
and now? i don't fucking care
just give me fucking sense

go outside, turn the corner
they just say
it's not so fuking easy now,
AND WHY?
give me fucking sense!

is it even real?
I’m lonely as fuck
and i want to die
someone please turn off that simulation
OR JUST GIVE ME FUCKING SENSE!

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soundcloud.com/daniel-gillett-5/post-punk-instrumental
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do you have music to go with it?

nope, just got inspiration on oxycodone

is it good? i never did such things

I feel like screamo would fit here. Better idea to to get undepressed and make happy music that will make people happy. There is way too much sad music as it is.

no you should kys

whether this is good or painfully edgy is really separated by what instrumentation and delivery is backing the lyrics

i would like to do this to, but my life isn't fucking happy
kys? you mean what?

Idk really, I think there's probably a context where this could work but it doesn't look super promising as it currently exists

The words aren't great on their own, but with the right music behind them it could make a good song. Something like an ironic, jokey hard rock song. Kind of like the "Blood Bagel" EP by Red Vox. vine.bandcamp.com/album/blood-bagel

what are you proposing?

I think we should cheer user up and make these lyrics into a song.

something like screamo like another user suggested could work I think, but several genres with roots in punk with yelly vocals could work I think

I think the thing to avoid would be anything quiet and earnest, like in a singer-songwriter folky context. In that instance these lyrics would likely be a cringe fest

goddamn I said "I think" so much, my bad

I love you

i can't even sing and have no will to do
so whatever
you may /thread this thread

what are you fucking gay???


love you too man, thanks

bump
I'm just curious of the opinions

These are better than any lyrics that I've written. 8/10

just checked this things on yt
im not into this

i would like something more like slowdive, joy division, MAYBE bones OR Giles Corey, Molly Nilsson, Horse Jumper of Love, Lo-Fi / Bedroom Pop / Indie / chill ambient, shit I listen to, but I know it wont fit to this

then i don't know if you are bad or im good xD

thanks

Actually these lyrics could work over some Joy Division type music.

too bad i can just write and self-pity

Semi-newfag here, how come almost everyone here has an urge to die?

You don't have to be the one singing. I could easily make a Joy Division-esque instrumental and get someone else on this board to sing it. We can make this work.

i dont even know where to find that post punk/ indie rock/ alternative/ new wave beat, audio? however its called

This is the cringiest thread i've seen. Ever.

can't tell about others, only place i socialise is Sup Forums
please do if you really want

Lo-fi would work well if you tweaked the lyrics a bit to fit the rythm

yeah, i know, i'm not that skilled and especially not that engaged

it just some little story of my life, writen inspired by oxycodone and bromazepam

Alright user, you've inspired me. I'll record a post-punk instrumental and look for a vocalist to sing the lyrics. If you have any musical suggestions let me know.

oh wow, didn't expect that
really that's great man
by musical suggestions you mean what?

Well i've gone with some really atmospheric sort of post-punk, with reverb, mechanical drum rhythms and wobbley guitars, if there is any sort of musical element you want (specific instrument doing a specific thing) you let me know. if not then i'll just do everything the way i want.

nah man, i know shit about music
i'm glad you put so much effort for me
do as you wish

Hey I have a recording setup and I mess around with punk
I'm not a great vocalist but I'd be down to try it out if you send me the instrumental
Here's a sample of my work:
soundcloud.com/shamart/martyr-complex

Great, i'm almost finished the track. The idea I have is to record the basic stuff of the song (rhythm guitar, bass, drums), then have the singer decide how they're going to sing it and record their vocals, then the singer sends me the recording with the finished vocal track and lastly i add lead guitar and synths to fill in the space, like in between the verses when there are no vocals.

wow man, it's fucking great
you inspired me too, now im trying to make some kind of cover in GIMP for this track
(but i have no skils in gimp ethier, so don't judge xD)

thanks, I really appreciate that!

bump

Alright the track is finished:
soundcloud.com/daniel-gillett-5/post-punk-instrumental

If anybody is interested in adding vocals, just download it from my soundcloud and record your part. The track is 6 minutes so you have plenty of room to fit the words. After you've recorded the vocals, send me the finished track (and an isolated vocal track if you can, it just helps with mixing, but if you can't then it's fine).

preatty chill, i like it, it's great, hope the words will fit, there are some "agressive" parts there, i don't know
really thank you for the effort

aaand I almost finished the cover

hey man, could you do the vocals? your voice would fit great

Yeah I'll jump on it.

Thanks a lot man

It's 3am where I live, so i'll be going to sleep now. I doubt this thread will still be active when I wake up, so you can use the email address on my soundcloud - [email protected] - to contact me about the track and send me the audio files.

Will do, I love the instrumental btw

fuck i tried

im not proud of this
i will try to bump this thread or i will make another one at the same time as today, or i don't know how we will contant eachother

fuuuck
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at fucking last
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compresed and bump

bump

turn it into a avant folk song with a pet sounds-esque twist

>4 hours of lifting every day
you must be fucking ripped

Your lyrics are bad and you should feel bad. I'd call you a strawman but for some reason a bunch of equally shit plebs have already answered your pleb call

Learn some music theory terms, just very basic ones, and listen to Joy Division. See if you can find where they use things like dissonance, syncopation, tension, etc. then try and mimic that in your own instrumental

thats not my oc
but i was ripped once
i dont have any instuments man, i just snorted some oxy and threw this shit here

im going to sleep too, bump thread for us please